Comments on Little Glass Pen: Matryoshka

Great poems, wonderful site. Thanks for sharing.

2010-10-15T18:20:24.542-07:00

Great poems, wonderful site. Thanks for sharing.

hey amanda my name is Carlos i am from Puerto Rico...

2010-04-10T14:39:28.734-07:00

hey amanda my name is Carlos i am from Puerto Rico, which is in the Caribbean and i am doing a paper on your poem. the first time i read it i found it fascinating and my teacher loved it! the more i read it the more i liked it.. its outstanding! i am just wondering if you could give me an insight of what the general theme your poem is? like in a single phrase or sentence resume the narration of this harsh, but real event of maternity. thanks!

Thank you for clearing up the usage of the word &q...

2010-03-09T06:20:52.698-08:00

Thank you for clearing up the usage of the word "Ute."

jeez louweeze! what's with this double comment...

2010-03-08T05:43:32.696-08:00

jeez louweeze! what's with this double comment crap! dang dang & dang again!

That's a huge compliment Dhyan, thank you for ...

2010-03-08T05:42:43.504-08:00

That's a huge compliment Dhyan, thank you for it.. I have a tendancy to favour all things in a temporal setting ;) It is a big thing to think somethings worth preserving for a revisit!

That's a huge compliment Dhyan, thank you for ...

2010-03-08T05:42:38.996-08:00

That's a huge compliment Dhyan, thank you for it.. I have a tendancy to favour all things in a temporal setting ;) It is a big thing to think somethings worth preserving for a revisit!

it have left me somewhat a blaze, for all the thin...

2010-03-08T02:25:04.601-08:00

it have left me somewhat a blaze, for all the things been said and more..
it is something i would rather have in print, holding it with my hands and eyes to read over and over. then wait and read it again...

Oh & Noah! thanks.. Great to 'see' you...

2010-03-08T02:03:57.660-08:00

Oh & Noah! thanks.. Great to 'see' you! I will be posting more often here & at myspace again from hereon in :)

I'm really excited about it too Graham! Not to...

2010-03-08T02:02:16.173-08:00

I'm really excited about it too Graham! Not too far off now!

Can't wait to hear you read your poems again i...

2010-03-08T01:43:11.918-08:00

Can't wait to hear you read your poems again in the live setting. All I can say is roll on April!

Can't wait to hear you read your work in the l...

2010-03-08T01:41:21.515-08:00

Can't wait to hear you read your work in the live setting again Amanda... roll on April is all I can say!

2010-03-07T21:57:15.960-08:00

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Thanks everyone for commenting, your feedback all ...

2010-03-07T21:57:12.566-08:00

Thanks everyone for commenting, your feedback all means so much to me.

Interesting thoughts Jhon, This is part of a MUCH longer poem, or really a series of poems, based on time I spent pregnant & married at 21 in a country town. So yes, there may be more definition required yet. I'll certainly take it on board.

Miss Jane> XX

Ms Lamond> XX

Je > X and :P for the P.L. thing AGAIN

A.Joy

as always a beautiful narrative from you. i shed ...

2010-03-07T21:00:06.998-08:00

as always a beautiful narrative from you. i shed a tear when reading remembering our chats about said day.

life is so real is it not...

I've missed reading you.

2010-03-07T20:36:49.114-08:00

I've missed reading you.

All of those things would be technically considere...

2010-03-07T20:18:28.445-08:00

All of those things would be technically considered trucks. [citation - dictionary, US DMV classification] that said I have little truck with you believing anything you wish. As for the poem - I think it is two poems and reads better that way. Divide them after "the empty quiet" verse. It reads rather rough, not unlike the ride in the poem, as two poems it works very well with each a small call to the other.

"Something triggers you . . ." Stirring...

2010-03-07T14:21:13.621-08:00

"Something triggers you . . ."

Stirring write. The ending made me flip and recoil as well.

I rode right along with this one from the fairytale beginning to the bloody end.

Well done.

Yep. That's about what I'd say if I held u...

2010-03-07T13:35:21.699-08:00

Yep. That's about what I'd say if I held up a bunch of premmie bunnys. Excuse me if I recoil.

A tad ocker? :D

This is brilliant, with an extremely subtle shift between the illusions of our fantasies and the starkness of it all. Gotta love the starkness. It just creeps up and, pow - straight to the moon! Nice work, poetry lady.

I'm a fairly brave man, but I am not sure I am...

2010-03-07T10:09:22.289-08:00

I'm a fairly brave man, but I am not sure I am brave enough to tell an owner of a Ranchero or El Camino that they do not own a truck.

A Subaru is right out, though. =)

As with all your work, the true emotions of this run deep, but I do love the more visceral images within the narrative of this story.

I love your work, Amanda.

Larry

Isn't it amazing how memories unfold. Somethi...

2010-03-07T09:00:54.395-08:00

Isn't it amazing how memories unfold. Something triggers you, and they unfold, in a way in a way connected only by your unconscious mind

I can't begin to tell you how much I love the ...

2010-03-07T06:55:05.039-08:00

I can't begin to tell you how much I love the idea that the two individuals climbing the tree might be squirrels Bryan!

Sorry about the change of tense Bryan, I did try to do it fairly gently.. I may have forgotten to double d'clutch ;)

& Ute, well this is the best I could do googling.. then ...such a faux pas! I lost the page & can't accredit it.. it was a very reputable page though, of that I'm sure ;)
A pickup truck (or pick-up truck or simply pickup) is a light motor vehicle with an open-top rear cargo area (bed) which is almost always separated from the cab to allow for chassis flex when carrying or pulling heavy loads.[citation needed]

Several North American vehicles, the Chevrolet El Camino, Ford Ranchero, and Honda Ridgeline and Subaru Baja have beds, but are not technically trucks[citation needed]. Although the El Camino and the Ranchero were built with body-on-frame architectures, they were based on existing station wagon platforms, while the Ridgeline uses a spot welded sheet steel monocoque (unibody) chassis in the same style as modern passenger cars. Trucks typically have either a tubular or channel rail chassis with a fully floating cab and separate cargo section to allow for chassis flex and prevent warping of the sheetmetal. The sheet steel in both of these sections is not a stressed member. A combination of the two styles, monocoque cab and engine bay welded to a 'c' section chassis rear is offered in Australia. It is known as the 'one tonner' because it is rated to carry some 250 kg (551 lb) more than the all monocoque style.[citation needed]

Vehicles like the Holden Ute and FPV Pursuit, colloquially called a ute or utility (from "Coupe utility") in Australia and New Zealand, are known in South Africa as a bakkie (pronounced "bucky"),in Romania as "slipper", in Egypt as "half truck", and in Israel as a tender. Panel vans, popular in Australia during the 1970s, were based on ute chassis; known in Egypt as "box".[citation needed] Coupé utilities and panel vans usually have an integral cargo bed behind the cabin with unibody or monocoque construction like automobiles.

thanks Bryan!

Interesting poem. Upon reading this poem for the ...

2010-03-07T06:24:07.003-08:00

Interesting poem.

Upon reading this poem for the first time, I interpreted the two individuals climbing the tree as a possible metaphor for animals; maybe squirrels.

As I continued to read, the poem became increasingly abstract as it turned from past tense to present tense rather suddenly, causing me to wonder what the photo had to do with the woman riding in the back of the ute (what exactly is an ute if I may ask?).

The poem ends with the woman's family shooting rabbits with a sly denotation by the father, which I thoroughly enjoyed.

I think this is a wonderful poem, but am still a bit confused how the picture in the Grandmother's room plays into the grand scheme?