absurdity of trying
to grip a fish
with needle fins
as it flaps gills
gulps choking air
hook mouth
to a memory
silence swells
to a freak wave
a wall of water
the smallness
of a body sucked
ten metres under
water beneath
a ledge of rock
Monday, January 5, 2009
Blue Alice
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"water. Water everywhere
and all the boards did shrink
water. water Everywhere
and not
a drop
to drink"
This is so tight Amanda. I love the rhythm that is created here. The urgency really heightened. And always, the sensorious sound of the sea...
G
I love this, Amanda.
And a wonderful title!
If there's such a thing as a perfect poem, this must come close!
I love the understatement, and the quiet inevitability of the shocking conclusion.
hopeless for that fish isn't it. glad I'm not him.
Read a few ....
like a lot....
Roger.
Incredibly vivid imagery here. It's been a pleasure discovering your writing. See you again soon. Cheers.
The last stanza is beautiful, but chilling.
I just happened upon your blog and I find this poem especially delightful. It has fantastic imagery and a narrative quality to it.
I'm impressed with your use of understated but highly vivid imagery.
reminds of childhood for some reason
This is really great. You got me with "absurdity of trying/to grip a fish"
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